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Tupacfan & The Desolateone's Poetry Collaboration

Tupacfan
Tupacfan Members, Moderators Posts: 2,428 Regulator
edited June 2011 in Waiting To Exhale
My first ever collab, HA! I love it! it still in the works but i thought i create a thread and cast our poetic verbs...

peace.

ya'll can suggest titles for this poem!!

Untitled..


I said open the door, let me in,
wipe my tears, erase my fears,
its been a struggle thru all these years,
I said open the door, let me in,
come take my pain away,
this heart's at dismay,
buried some where out sea,
me tired of all the love pleas,
I said open the door, let me in,
unlock the door,
pick me up off the floor,
tired of this war,
I keep asking what it's for.....

inside is quaint and comfy
the plush furniture is used to tears
the taste puts you on the brink and hungry
no longer afraid of the leers
not the least bit embarrassed to hold stares
levels of conscience where you may weep proudly

Let me talk to you,
see it's been a year his soul departed,
and I'm still stuck on reminiscent,
he was a warrior's descendant,
thru the years, we been abuse and neglected,
parents, we never had that, we were rejected,
mentally, we were all infected,
the streets is all that he ever respected,
sadly, that's where he felt accepted,
his life, they took it,
all my fights with him, I never meant it.
Birth mom's i resented,
birth pops, I disrespected,
my relationships, always been ejected,
my brothers, my only siblings, I miss them,
cancer, I can't fathom,
friendships, fatal and disastrous, I can't have them.
The lord, I scream take me far away, as far as heaven,
I'm not a heathen, but I'm scathing,
like a scavenger on a mission scavenging,
not for wealth, nor fame, nor pity,
but for peace, good health, and food to feed plenty......

of past lives there no remembrance
so is sickness there no hindrance
a tucked away mansion in utopia will be sufficient
no apocalpse predicted or wonderin where all the fish went
hallways with statues of descendents
vanity rooms to collect your senses
it doesnt feel the slight bit like jail, no bars or fences
a place where love has never failed so theres no need for defenses
no urge to wipe at eyes and face covered in happy tears
that can be used for puddles to play with our reflections
or perhaps we can be sado-masochistic
succumb to the hurt and in the pain find pleasure
say we keep searchin for ways out of this desert
thought can build maps and ideas light paths to treasures

take me there, lead me there,
let's cast my tears away into grave stones,
atop of Mt. Haleakala is where'd they'd find us mad stone,
turn off all ya phones,
shhhh...this a duet by pacfan and desoloteone,
my first callab and probably another one,
in the presence we counting butterflies, it's more than just one,
we eating fresh fruits off trees, like adam and eve,
chillin in black sand, i know ya'll can't believe,
i'm not talking Hawaii, im talking Belize.....

miles of foliage
a candystore to herbivores
rarely hear a word of war
we will bury them there
in soft soil
return and see what sprouts
perhaps save some
only for us
so we may celebrate triumphs
or plot a trail back
make a map
incase im struck with nostalgia
so i may not have to reminise of you covered in them
when i became a butterfly and your tears were honey

Comments

  • REAL_POETICAL
    REAL_POETICAL Members Posts: 347 ✭✭
    edited June 2011
    speechless...so speechless at this piece...amazing collaboration with so much emotion delivered with unique design...the whole feel of this poem is like of a coffee house setting where you just can take a load off and relax...its crazy how each line of poetry soothes the soul...bottom line good work...keep droppin those words that could open doors in the mind of closed locks called poetry my fellow poets


    peace
  • Tupacfan
    Tupacfan Members, Moderators Posts: 2,428 Regulator
    edited June 2011
    Glad you digg this real p, I enjoyed this collaboration, it wasn't really intended for a collab but I see it that way so yea lol. and your right, this piece was soothing... shouts out to desoloateone for sharing his creativity as well..

    again thanks..

    peace.
  • DMTxTHC
    DMTxTHC Members Posts: 14,218 ✭✭✭✭✭
    edited June 2011
    I can always appreciate poetry, much props...
  • Tupacfan
    Tupacfan Members, Moderators Posts: 2,428 Regulator
    edited June 2011
    I can always appreciate poetry, much props...

    No doubt. Keep checking us out here on the talent section... support is always motivating..

    thanks for taking the time to read and comment on this beautiful collab..

    peace.
  • stupot0607
    stupot0607 Members Posts: 1,914 ✭✭✭
    edited June 2011
    Thanks for this, i Really Enjoyed this piece.

    Ive just got up out of bed aswell, what a great way to start the day! haha

    As Far as a title goes i cant think productively yet haha, i need a cup of tea before my brain starts to fully function.
  • RuffDraft
    RuffDraft Members, Writer Posts: 4,753 ✭✭✭✭
    edited June 2011
    'a place where love has never failed so theres no need for defenses' - this speaks on so many volumes, I think all defences stem from broken hearts... fear of hurt. We as people just end up broken and battered and it affects the future... it's something they never tell you about what will happen after you first love, all loves afterwards will be tainted by the rejection/failure of the initial journey.

    Damn! That line was nice!! Blew the whole piece to another level for me, props TupacFan, how'd you find collaborating?
  • Tupacfan
    Tupacfan Members, Moderators Posts: 2,428 Regulator
    edited June 2011
    RuffDraft wrote: »
    'a place where love has never failed so theres no need for defenses' - this speaks on so many volumes, I think all defences stem from broken hearts... fear of hurt. We as people just end up broken and battered and it affects the future... it's something they never tell you about what will happen after you first love, all loves afterwards will be tainted by the rejection/failure of the initial journey.

    Damn! That line was nice!! Blew the whole piece to another level for me, props TupacFan, how'd you find collaborating?

    I know right, that line is SO powerful, I don't even think Desoloateone know's that.. and Ruff Draft, that line was Desoloateones... it's nice huh? lol..

    I like collaborating, I think it' creates and sparks creativity.. i love that!

    thanks for taking the time read this jawn.. to ayebody.. cause this rightchere, is beautiful creation..

    peace!
  • RuffDraft
    RuffDraft Members, Writer Posts: 4,753 ✭✭✭✭
    edited June 2011
    tupacfan wrote: »
    I know right, that line is SO powerful, I don't even think Desoloateone know's that.. and Ruff Draft, that line was Desoloateones... it's nice huh? lol..

    I like collaborating, I think it' creates and sparks creativity.. i love that!

    thanks for taking the time read this jawn.. to ayebody.. cause this rightchere, is beautiful creation..

    peace!

    You should pass it on if they don't post here from me...

    Really enjoyed the piece as a whole too, covers such a wide variety, is long but never loses its pace...

    Hope you're well.
  • Tupacfan
    Tupacfan Members, Moderators Posts: 2,428 Regulator
    Desolateone!!!!

    I still love this jawn!