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They Lied - By Tupacfan

TupacfanTupacfan Members, Moderators Posts: 2,428 Regulator
edited October 2011 in Waiting To Exhale
He lied,
she lied,
they both lied.
I tried,
I even confide,
they denied.
So, I ran and cried,
aboarded many flights,
absconding from all my plights,
exceeding dangerous heights.
Yearning for parental love with all soul might..
continuing the fight,
4 year trek and still can't see the light,
As though if i'm out of sight,
while searching for what I thought was right
came across fruits that weren't ripped..

Truth I still search,
in dire for answers,
the heart hurts.
My soul a living beast,
awaiting for truth feast,
for I can be meek,
truth I still seek.

In death she declared defeat,
his silence, he deceit
I repeat,
His silence, he deceit.
Me, not understanding
a child, a daughter, they couldn't keep,
a sow they longer have to reap....

He lied,
she lied, they both lied,
I tried,
I even confide,
they denied....


I haven't finished it off like i want too, so I'm still working on it..

Comments

  • RuffDraftRuffDraft Members, Writer Posts: 4,753 ✭✭✭✭
    edited October 2011
    Damn, the flow on this is super fast and comes thick and fast too; no line is weak and everything continues that fast paced motion that shouldn't be lost (which I'm sure you'll know already!) Great piece as always TupacFan. Really appreciate a piece like this and always leaves the reader wanting the back story! Just great to see you still posting and hopefully in good health :tu
  • TupacfanTupacfan Members, Moderators Posts: 2,428 Regulator
    edited October 2011
    RuffDraft wrote: »
    Damn, the flow on this is super fast and comes thick and fast too; no line is weak and everything continues that fast paced motion that shouldn't be lost (which I'm sure you'll know already!) Great piece as always TupacFan. Really appreciate a piece like this and always leaves the reader wanting the back story! Just great to see you still posting and hopefully in good health :tu

    As always, I appreciate the time taken to read this jawn.. and you right, it's faced paced, recitial material.

    I haven't been writing much lately, I just been bugged on some real life personal 🤬 , but overall, I'm good.

    Thanks for reading Ruff Draft.

    Peace.
  • REAL_POETICALREAL_POETICAL Members Posts: 347 ✭✭
    edited October 2011
    That needed a smoke break lol....even though it wasn't finished...the message felt complete with the way the piece was delivered...the way you quickly went along with the story and the impact within just a snap of a finger...amazing results 0_0....bottom line good work as always...keep dropping the words that make souls quiver called poetry my fellow poetess

    peace
  • TupacfanTupacfan Members, Moderators Posts: 2,428 Regulator
    edited October 2011
    That needed a smoke break lol....even though it wasn't finished...the message felt complete with the way the piece was delivered...the way you quickly went along with the story and the impact within just a snap of a finger...amazing results 0_0....bottom line good work as always...keep dropping the words that make souls quiver called poetry my fellow poetess

    peace

    lol, thank you real p, for reading and commenting as always. you know i don't think im going to even finish it, because like you said, its completed just the way it was written, like them emotions are done with.. why go back and try and finish something that I feel it's nothing more to even say.. haha. sometimes we don't realized these thing's till after it's written, giving us a reflecting thought, weather it's good for us to revise that and or just leave the way it is..

    anways thaiks..

    Peace.
  • Dr.ChemixDr.Chemix Members Posts: 11,823 ✭✭✭✭✭
    edited October 2011
    I like the flow...quick but powerful jabs...

    There are some heavy mentals you are about to release on this one...

    let it flow...and go there...

    you're hitting home with your words...don't let this one go...
  • VSOPVSOP Members Posts: 195 ✭✭
    edited October 2011
    Killed it with this flow...my life in a few words

    "Lifes a 🤬 , 🤬 forbid the 🤬 divorce me"

    still got it never lost it I see lol
  • TupacfanTupacfan Members, Moderators Posts: 2,428 Regulator
    edited October 2011
    Dr.Chemix wrote: »
    I like the flow...quick but powerful jabs...

    There are some heavy mentals you are about to release on this one...

    let it flow...and go there...

    you're hitting home with your words...don't let this one go...




    thanks for reading and recommending that i keep going with this.. and I haved.. I'm gon have to update this later on when i"m close to my composition book. Again thanks for reading..


    VSOP wrote: »
    Killed it with this flow...my life in a few words

    "Lifes a 🤬 , 🤬 forbid the 🤬 divorce me"

    still got it never lost it I see lol

    lol, thanks bruh.. I been on writers blocks with lots to talk about, but it's like hmmmm... how can I approach it lol...
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